Question

I come from a small island named Puerto Rico. When I was 4 years old, I came to the United States in 2006 due to my health problems. At a young age, my parents work hard, so I will receive the best care possible. This inspired me to want to become a doctor. For that reason, my goal is to make it a priority to help those who suffer from health problems.
Can someone add on to this and make corrections if needed. This will be 30 points.

Answer 1

I think the only thing you would need to change is at a young age my parents work hard, so I will recive the best care possible to maybe, when I was young my parents would work hard to provide the best care possible. Other than that I think your good

Answer 2

I come from the small island of Puerto Rico. I came to the United States when I was four yearly old in 2006 due to my health problems. My parents worked hard at a young age to provide me with the best care possible. Their hard work inspired me to become a doctor. For that reason, my goal is to help those who suffer from health problems, a priority.