Question

Read this sentence. To raise money for uniforms, a car wash will be held by members of the volleyball team. How should the sentence be revised? A. Members of the volleyball team, on Saturday to raise money for uniforms, will hold a car wash. B. To raise money for uniforms, on Saturday a car wash will be held by members of the volleyball team. C. On Saturday to raise money for uniforms, members of the volleyball team will hold a car wash. D. To raise money for uniforms, members of the volleyball team will hold a car wash on Saturday. Please help me.

Answer 1

Answer:

The best way to revise the sentence is:

D. To raise money for uniforms, members of the volleyball team will hold a car wash on Saturday.

Explanation:

The original sentence is not really defective, it is only missing a piece of information concerning when the car wash will be held. The best way to add it is to include it at the end of the sentence, as is done in letter D. To raise money for uniforms, members of the volleyball team will hold a car wash on Saturday.

Let's take a look at the other options to understand why they are not usable.

Letter A does begin with the subject of the sentence, but interrupts it with extra information, preventing the sentence from being a direct one. It sounds really confusing. Letter B adds the "on Saturday" information at a strange place, also interrupting the direct flow of the sentence. Letter C puts the "on Saturday" information right at the beginning. It's not that this can't be done. But, in this case, a comma should be added after it. Nevertheless, it makes the introduction of the sentence too long, which is not a good thing.