Answer:
The phrase that makes this thesis statement wordy is: electronic mail.
Explanation:
Wordiness refers to making something longer than it should be, that is, using too many words to express something. In the case of the thesis statement we are analyzing here, all words seem to be necessary with the exception of the final phrase. As we know, "electronic mail" is no longer an expression in use. It's been decades since it has been replaced by the shorter version "email", "e" standing for "electronic". Not only does using "electronic mail" make the sentence wordy, it also makes it sound old-fashioned.
There was once a detective who had perused a terrible scene at a house. Sad to say, the type of situation he had to take care was quite a banal one but, also a very implicit one. It was very imminent that the father had done the abuse to the mother; this was was easily assumed due to the fact the kinds were 3 to 4 years old. The detective has a very strong antipathy feeling towards these type of cases but, that is part of his job.
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The four selections use different media to present information about effects of human activities on the environment. There are advantages and disadvantages to each medium. For example, the photographs and diagrams in "A Natural Balance"
