Measure 7 cannot have a breath mark because it is not the end of a phrase there. In measures 5, 9, and 13, you could add a breath mark because there is enough time to pause, and it is the end of a phrase there.
Toxic Mascuulinity is a very sore subject for most men, but I think that you can have a normal average man with a thought bubble of the man thinking of his ideal self, THis resembles the Mans wishes to be what the world expects him to be.