Question

The Human Resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop led by Joseph Pelletier. He has 20 years of experience in career development training and will help you gain a clearer understanding of your career goals he will also discuss tools to work toward your career goals. The workshop will take place November 10 and 11, and it will start at 9:30 a.m. and end at 5:30 p.m., and there will be coffee and tea in the morning lunch will be provided in the afternoon. Respond to this e-mail to sign up because only 40 spaces are available.
How could you improve this message? check all that apply.

a. Correct comma splices.
b. Do not use simple sentences.
c. Increase sentence lengths.
d. Vary sentence types.
e. Correct fragments.

Answer 1

Answer:

The correct options are D and E      

Explanation:

To explain option D, please note that sentences are classified according to their purpose. The 4 most common types are

• "declarative sentence (statement)"
• "interrogative sentence (question)"
• "imperative sentence (command)"
• "exclamative sentence (exclamation)"

The author of the message used declarative sentences a lot. Some of them have been modified. Please see 4, 5 and 6 below.

The sentence is reconstructed below using some of the options above and more to improve the readability of the message.

The Human Resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop led by Joseph Pelletier. He has 20 years of experience in career development training and will help you gain a clearer understanding of your career goals. (1)

(2) During the training, Pelletier (3) will also discuss tools that will help you work toward your career goals. The workshop is scheduled  (4) take place November 10 and 11, and it will start at 9:30 a.m. and end at 5:30 p.m.. (5) We have made provision for coffee and tea to be served in the morning,  and lunch will be provided in the afternoon. (6) You are encouraged to sign up as soon as you can as there are only 40 spaces are available.

1. Insertion of break into another line to allow for increased readability
2. Correct fragments
3. Reduction in the repetitive use of the pronoun "He"
4. Varying of sentence types
5. Varying of sentence types and Correct Fragments
6. Varying of sentence types

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