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Explanation:
Thesis K-pop is so popular because it attracts more than thirty-five million fans during their world tours each year. Reason 1 The reason how K-pop got so popular is “their addictive melodies, slick choreography, and production values. They also have an endless parade of attractive South Korean performers who spend years in grueling studio systems learning to sing and dance in synchronized perfection”. Reason 2 K-pop became popular worldwide is because “they became the international face of South Korea thanks to an extremely regimented coordinated production system. More than any other international music industry K-pop has been strategically designed to earworm its way into your brain and to elevate South Korean and its culture onto the world stage”. Reason 3 We like K-pop because of the well-produced music videos we watch like drug addicts. They are either colorful and fun emotional and deep. In K-pop, you need to use teamwork, but the quote is “teamwork makes dream work”. Conclusion K-pop is so popular because of how addictive their songs are. Their good singing and choreography are in their music videos. They even have good performers who work for hours making the best out of their music by using teamwork. My quote came from...
Thesis: Humans are things that live on earth and live off of other animals.
Re-statement of thesis: Humans are a complex species that dominate any parts of the world and play an important role in life. Humans learn though studding and listening from others and continue the path of success.
