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Yes but there's a mistake.
Mistake: Some where in the middle
It says "Oh hey, my im Osric, we better get started".
You have to fix Oh hey, my im Osric to, "Oh hey, I'm Osric".
But, other things are that this is very creative, it mentions words like, "Vividly, rare, miniature, rigid, desolate and lingered. These are very creative words.
And yes, thanks for that awesome lil' story!
You should start off by saying I will be comparing ..... and ...... Something similar between them is ..... Sonething different is ....
