Question

A farmer's market is a place where farmers sell their products. They sell their products directly to consumers. They sell fresh produce. They sell meat and eggs. They sell artisan cheeses. They sell hand-harvested honey. The markets serve as a place for farmers to get the best price. They serve as a place for consumers to get the best products. They benefit the entire community. Which BEST describes revisions that would improve this paragraph?

Answer 1

Answer:

Combine sentences to remove unnecessary repetition and add variety to the length and types of sentences.

Explanation:

They keep saying "They sell" too much. That is a form of repitition.

Answer 2

Answer:

Combine sentences to avoid repetitions.

Explanation:

The problem with this paragraph is that there are plenty of repetitions. So it is necessary to combine sentences. To do that, we can add some connectors like besides, also, furthermore, in particular, indeed, in addition, such as, for instance, etc. Depending on the type of sentences you have to think about the best connector to combine sentences in order to avoid repetitions.

Another way to avoid repetitions is for example, replacing words, using synonyms or pronouns.

For example:

A farmer's market is a place where farmers sell their products directly to consumers. So they sell fresh produce such as meat, eggs, artisan cheeses. They also trade up hand-harvested honey. Furthermore, the markets serve as a place for farmers and consumers to get the best price and the best products. Besides they benefit the entire community.