Answer: something you need to change is "you'll even get a higher paid! than the school you used to work for" to "you'll even get a higher paid than the school you used to work for". there seems to be a mistake there. also change your mistake to "besides all the great things i just mentioned this job has, this job will also help you gain more experience in communicating, interacting with different people, and kids making it easier for you, in case if in the future you decide to apply for jobs that involve working with kids"
besides all that, your essay was really good. i would've never came up with this essay or your ideas if I were YOU. it was really good. i think your essay is pretty convincing.
Explanation: it's pretty easy what i did. all i had to do was read the article/essay thoroughly from top to bottom and see if it seems correct and then move on to the mistakes and correct them.
This is a literary device referred to as a hyperbole (pronounced hi-per-bel-e). It's an over-exaggerated statement usually in order to emphasise something.
