Answer:
Bob did the absolute wrong thing. Any item found on the ground, regardless of what it is, is not yours. In this example, Bob found money at a gas station. Chances are high that somebody dropped it by mistake after paying for gas. The right thing to do would have been to give the cash to the cashier.
Word choice can have the Meaning where Words can be chosen for one of two meanings.The denotative meaning or the connotative meaning. Also take into consideration the
Specificity. This is the Use of words that are both correct in meaning and specific in description.
Thirdly the
Audience. Good word choice takes the reader into feeling like part or considered(consideration) and lastly is the Style
It is really a great story so far. What you need to do next is to write what did Ryker and Noelle do when they heard the footsteps above them. Did they investigate or did they leave the house? Since Ryker had already told Noelle that his brother was going to try and murder her, I don't think you should send them directly upstairs to see what or who made the footsteps. You should let the story continue a little more to be more dramatic. Don't let the story be a cliche like others would do. Perhaps, they could hide and wait to see who comes down. They could also catch the brother and then call the police or even the parents. You want the story to be different and have more excite to make the reader be wowed in the end.
