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I haven't understand your qn you want a paragraph of someone buying an apple watch
Revise by yourself then ask someone else to revise the writing. It would be good to have someone with a different thought process than you. That person will normally spot out other things in the writing you might have not noticed.
Don't be afraid to make big changes in the writing! If you do not like a paragraph and wish to delete then it's ok, you can also rewrite the paragraph as you see fit or you can move it around to a different place in the writing. You can also do that before making small changes like grammar, spelling, and formatting.
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Answer: The magician pulled off an awesome magic trick.
First off, The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Nighttime was an amazing book, just saying.
Second, I'll give the answer a go!
Christopher's trip to London helped make him feel more independent and to show him that he could do things on his own. He was able to go all on his own with no help (except from his rat, Toby, of course). And so, this trip showed him that he was even smarter than he thought he was.
This is not the full answer. If you need more, maybe go back over the book a little bit!
I hope this helps out!