Question

Is there anytings that needs to be improve in the essay?

Answer 1

Be sure you keep your tense the same throughout the essay, so change "ornated" (which you can't even say) to "ornate", and "hanged" (which in proper past tense is "hung") to "hang". Your final sentence is a little weak. In the conclusion, talk about why it's such a big deal, why people have fun, how memorable it is; you know, leave the reader with an impression, or rather knowing exactly how you feel.