Seems to look pretty fun, but you could have rhymed lines 6 & 8; those are the only ones that don't rhyme. You could have line 6's last word end in -le, -el, or -al (line 8's last sound was like an L), or line 8's last word end in the same sound as line 6's. But other than that, it's a great start! I'll give it a 9.5/10.
