Question

John stepped out of the darkness with blood on his hands and ash on his face. The blast nearly killed him, but he must try again. The Construction company needed this Master Robot to help. John slowly worked out the kinks and tried to bring his masterpiece online. (mumbles) “A cut here, put a transformer here.” He got up and pulled the lever one more time. Bright flashes of electricity shined above the table; the robot lay there waiting. Suddenly a bolt of electricity shot into the robot's access port on its neck. John knew it wouldn’t work; the town had given him a scarce amount of money for this project so that meant bad resources. A spark from the lever made John jump in pain, but it was too late. His entire body was engulfed in flames within a fraction of a second. He slowly died and fell onto the floor. After that, the electricity stopped running and the robot sat up and it’s eyes squinted as it stared at the dead body of its creator.: is this a good story

Answer 1

Yes this is a very well written story but if it is for a high level grade I would add a little more detail

Answer 2

Yes a well written story and a good format!