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Can someone edit this and add more sentences or edit it.. this is about would u rather be a patriot or loyalist. Also can u add a conclusion tyy.
That's a tough question to answer, both Loyalists and Patriots fought for a similar thing... equality. Myself, I would go for the Patriots. Patriots wanted more than equality, they also wanted freedom. They no longer wanted anything to do with the British rules, they wanted a change. The Patriots wanted everybody to have an input on the rules, and agree on them.
Since I am a woman, in 1775 women did not have all the rights we do now. We were practically forced to stay home, and weren't allowed to do many things because of our gender. Patriots fought for freedom and equality, and in my situation, I agree with both and it would really benefit how I would live and how I would make a living.
Continuing on the topic before, I believe in fairness, equality, and most of all, freedom. I have goals in my life, and I would not be able to get over half done without these things. The bare necessities. It is unfair that some people would have an upper hand just because of his or her skin color, gender, identification, and financial status.
As a 14 year old girl, life would be hard in 1775, with no freedom, equality, or choice. Many young girls during this time never got the chance to live their lives fully because they were girls, young, and maybe even because of their skin colors. My financial status isnt at its highest right now, this would just bring me down even more. We should all have the same starting point.

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i added a few things and deleted some oh and i added a conclusion

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both Loyalists and Patriots fought for a similar thing... equality. I would go for the Patriots. Patriots wanted more than equality, they wanted freedom. They no longer wanted to follow British rules, they wanted a change for good. The Patriots wanted everybody to have a different view on the rules, and all agree upon them

Since I am a woman, in 1775 women did not have all the rights we do now. We were practically forced to stay home was not normalized to join workforce, all because of gender.  Patriots fought for freedom and equality, including gender equality. So that women would have more juties in society other than wash clothes and tend to their husbands and children. I agree that women should be able to make their own choices and as if for everyone. Freedom is needed for the world to thrive. The patriots believed that freedom was an essential part for their revolution.  

I believe in fairness, equality, and most of all, being able to have a choice. I have goals in my life, as everyone does. I wouldn't be able to accomplish my goals without the freedom to do so.  The bare necessities. It is unjust that some people would have an upper hand just because of his or her skin color, gender, identification, and financial status. It makes the world unfair and not worth living for. Everyone should be able to enjoy life that the universe has given us.  

As a 14 year old girl, life would be hard in 1775, with no freedom, equality, or choice. Many young girls during this time never got the chance to live their lives fully because they were young girls. My financial status isn't at its highest right now, but that is ok, because i know i still have potential. I will be able to work soon and figure out my own problems. Without freedom, equality, and justice, i wouldn't be able to achieve greatness.

In conclusion, I would rather be a patriot so i can keep fighting for my personal greatness I have a lot ahead of me, i can't let a higher being restrict me from crossing my own finish line. I chose freedom., respect, justice. I choose my future.