Answer:
Cheyanne, the girl with long, thick, black hair, was forever seen as very clever and intuitive for solving the strange, haunting mystery of the horrible murder of Mrs. Mila Quintero, who was age 67 and a terribly lonesome widow when she was poisoned while at feast that her mother, an old, wrinkly, yet lively woman, had worked on preparing for weeks.
Explanation:
1. This sentence is way too long. It goes on and on.
2. Too many adjectives!
3. Typically when describing something in a singular sentence, if you want to go in depth for detail, you need to stick with one or possibly even two subjects. Otherwise there is an overload of information.
4. Stuffing this much detail until a singular sentence confuses and bores the reader.
5. Some of this information is unnecessary. Just because you have a subject or noun, you don't have to add an appositive.
