How is this poem...I made it myself. We had to make a poem for homework, tell me honest opinion. The poem is called "Estrella is
..." "Estrella is my little star
Shining bright
When I think of Estrella
I'm flushed with happiness
From head to toe
Estrella is the reason
Why I still walk this Earth
For if there was no Estrella
I would have been long gone
No longer connected to this world
Though we've never met face to face TwT
Is it wrong to wish for something more
Don't get me wrong; I love where we're at now
But I long for something more... because
Estrella is...
Smart, beautiful...
Kind, caring...best of all Estrella is
True to Estrella's self; which makes me like Estrella even more
My little star... Estrella
Oh, how I wish could meet you...
In person
To comfort you...
To hug you...
To beat up whoever hurts you...
But all I can do is...
Talk to you from a distance
But never fear
I will always be here; because
Estrella is...
My little star
And don't you forget it TwT"
I feel like this may be harsh but the poem doesnt have many rhetoric devices to capture a reader. Instead of smart, beautiful, kind, caring, I would suggest using imagery of Estrella that makes her that way. What makes her this way? Was she a animal lover, helped anyone in need, cook food for you? I would shorten the amount of adjectived to 3 becasue of the rule of three. I liked the repetition of "you" at the end of the poem. All in all, this is cute poem thou :)
I didn’t read a bit of this poem but uh it’s pretty great and hey did you know that the actor who plays “ Regina George” is the woman in the notebook :)
I would want them to focus on something they already promised to do... the climate problem. Climate is a really big problem and it needs to be fixed! :)
