Toby wrote this paragraph for his persuasive essay: Anyone can grow a garden. You can grow fresh vegetables. You can harvest all
summer. The vegetables taste good. Growing a garden is good exercise. You pull weeds. You trim plants. Everyone should grow a vegetable garden. What change should Toby make to improve his paper?
Toby should add a subtopic sentence after "Anyone can grow a garden" to answer why. For instance he could've said "Simply, you can just buy seeds, dig a small hole, insert the seeds and water them daily." Also he could've included a quote from an article or a credible person as proof. He should've improved his wording to make his paragraph more smooth and clear & concise.
