Paragraph 1.
"Oh!," said Goldilocks, "the controlling idea is too vague. As a reader, I can't tell what your essay will really be about. When writing a controlling idea you want to be specific."
Paragraph 2.
"Oh my," exclaimed Goldilocks. "This controlling idea is too wordy. A controlling idea should be clear and concise. That was I will know what your essay is about."
Paragraph 3.
"Well, well," Goldilocks said. "this controlling idea doesn't address the prompt. When you look at what it is asking you to write, don't you see how it is asking you to explain the importance? This just says it is is important. But I do like how you thought of another word that means to not give up!"
Answer:
A lot of young people love playing video games but how does gaming affect there lives?
