example of purposeful tone
In one motion the tall young man beckoned me over with urgency. I felt anxious and somewhat uncomfortable as I stumbled toward his intimidating figure. Before he had the chance to open his mouth and belittle me in the passive-aggressive manner I am so often spoken to in. My shirt stature, round body-type, and greasy comb-over frequently earned me snide comments of my inferiority to the rest of the world. I can’t tell you now, there is absolutely nothing an attractive and seemingly successful man like this could tell me without the sole intention of making him feel better about himself. I will not be used to prop up another man’s ego this time, I will make him suffer as I have for over fifty years
It’s Specific nouns because it make your writing clearer and vivid
Little
flatbutted
mystery snake
I believe that since you stated at the beginning that he's half human half Vulcan, it flows better when using "As a result" at the beginning of the next sentence. This is because his being torn is resulting from his mixed heritage.