I believe that you should just check your spelling , capitalize some I's and the word January .
You should also give more detail about the Sunday event.
When you say the word conclusion I begin to think about a short paragraph / summary , this means you should bring the reader in , draw my attention to your mint idea.
I really hope that I'm helping you , :)
Explanation:
they are celebrating the festival with rapturous mood...
Well chronological order is like A-Z with events but since this is English I would pick casual transitions.
Daisy is pursued Gatsby is pursuing, Tom and Daisy are tired.
