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It was April 25th, 4 p.m., when the woman, Hattie Stephan, who had lived to be 100-years, had passed in a devasting fire that ravaged her condominium. In five hours, the flames managed to destroy two nearby condominiums before being contained.
The fire had started in the living room of her condominium. Authorities say an electrical spark may have caused an oxygen tank in the room to ignite. During the fire, Hattie was in a wheelchair making it hard to escape the growing flames. Unfortunately, she didn’t manage to escape this disastrous fire.
Her family remembers her as a loving person willing to listen to anyone who needed a listening ear. Her family recalls that she was an avid reader who enjoyed reading the daily newspaper still reading plenty of books from the local library.
Her son, Richard Stephan who said, “She was a wonderful woman. She was blessed to have lived to 100, but we still think she was gone too soon.
Mr./Mrs. ______
Your article has been corrected; please follow the few tips I have added down below.
Remember to check the endings of your words. In the sentence when you said “Her family members remembered Hattie”, you misspelled her name and said “Hatty”
Remember to make things plural when they need to be. “The same fire destroyed two other condominium.” It should be condominiums.
Add a comma when it is needed. “The 100-year-old woman was killed when a fire ravaged her condominium on Saturday April 25th.” It needed to be “The 100-year-old woman was killed when a fire ravaged her apartment on Saturday, April 25th.
Respectfully,
It was April 25th, 4 p.m., when the woman, Hattie Stephan, who had lived to be 100-years, had passed in a devasting fire that ravaged her condominium. In five hours, the flames managed to destroy two nearby condominiums before being contained.
The fire had started in the living room of her condominium. Authorities say an electrical spark may have caused an oxygen tank in the room to ignite. During the fire, Hattie was in a wheelchair making it hard to escape the growing flames. Unfortunately, she didn’t manage to escape this disastrous fire.
Her family remembers her as a loving person willing to listen to anyone who needed a listening ear. Her family recalls that she was an avid reader who enjoyed reading the daily newspaper still reading plenty of books from the local library.
Her son, Richard Stephan who said, “She was a wonderful woman. She was blessed to have lived to 100, but we still think she was gone too soon.
Mr./Mrs. ______
Your article has been corrected; please follow the few tips I have added down below.
Remember to check the endings of your words. In the sentence when you said “Her family members remembered Hattie”, you misspelled her name and said “Hatty”
Remember to make things plural when they need to be. “The same fire destroyed two other condominium.” It should be condominiums.
Add a comma when it is needed. “The 100-year-old woman was killed when a fire ravaged her condominium on Saturday April 25th.” It needed to be “The 100-year-old woman was killed when a fire ravaged her apartment on Saturday, April 25th.
Respectfully,
(your name/editor here)
Explanation:
Change the answer to suit yourself and to avoid plagarisim. (Your work is usually checked for that.)
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