Question

Revise the passage below to use both dialogue and description in order to better develop the characters and engage the reader.

Answer 1

Answer:

The woman sat at the table drinking her coffee. She looked thoughtful. I hope he doesn't take the job, she thought. They had been really good friends and she didn't want her friend leaving. The man sitting across from her told her that he was thinking of taking the job in Wichita. "I am going to take the job at Wichita." She looked at him. "But why?", she asked. That was 2,000 miles away. "Why are you accepting the job? Isn't there a good enough job here?" She asked. "This job gives me more money than any job around here, and my bills are very high; I need this job to keep a roof over me and my family's head, food and water, and electricity." Said her friend. She sighed and got teary-eyed. "But I don't want you to go!", She said. "I'm sorry, but I have to....." His voice trailed off. She got up and gave him a hug. 30 minutes later, they said they're goodbyes. Then he was gone. Everyday the woman was not happy; until 3 months later he finally started calling. She was normal after that, but she was not completely whole without him. That's how it was for a long, long time.

Explanation:

Done now please mark brainliest :3

Answer 2

Answer:

The woman sat at the table drinking her coffee. She looked thoughtful. I hope he doesn't take the job, she thought. They had been really good friends and she didn't want her friend leaving. The man sitting across from her told her that he was thinking of taking the job in Wichita. "I am going to take the job at Wichita." She looked at him. "But why?", she asked. That was 2,000 miles away. "Why are you accepting the job? Isn't there a good enough job here?" She asked. "This job gives me more money than any job around here, and my bills are very high; I need this job to keep a roof over me and my family's head, food and water, and electricity." Said her friend. She sighed and got teary-eyed. "But I don't want you to go!", She said. "I'm sorry, but I have to....." His voice trailed off. She got up and gave him a hug. 30 minutes later, they said they're goodbyes. Then he was gone. Everyday the woman was not happy; until 3 months later he finally started calling. She was normal after that, but she was not completely whole without him. That's how it was for a long, long time.

Explanation:

The guy above me was correct!!