Pronunciation and Word misplacement
A lot of descriptive imagery, excellent setting and sophisticated language. Use of punctuation is varied and concise which effectively engages the readers to continue reading.
One problem is sentence length. No examiner wants to mark your exam and immediately get hit in the face with a chunk of words. Separate your paragraphs individually.
C, verbs are 'action words'
For example:
Tommy is walking down the street.
Walking is the verb because that's what the subject, Tommy is doing.
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