Victor Guzman Victor is the captain of the Tangerine soccer team. He's passionate about soccer and his friends, and great at motivating them to do their best. He has a habit of giving everyone a nickname, whether they want one or not, like Fisher Man, Cesar Salad, and Charlie the Tuna.
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