Looks Great! A few critiques...
In paragraph 1 i think you spelled socialize wrong.
Are you taking this information from any sources?
if so, try using this to write you essays next time...
K-key idea
E- evidence -1
A- analyze evidence( give your thoughts
T-transition-( i.e.- Continuing on,
E- Evidence -2
A- analyze evidence
L- link the paragraph all together
it really helps to keep everything organized and consistent. For your introduction, try using a hook, a bridge , and finally a thesis. A thesis should ALWAYS be the last sentence in your intro paragraph.
For your conclusion start of with your thesis, go into your Main ideas of the essay, and then give something for the reader to think about (clincher)
Hopefully this helped!!
The prepositional phrase is beneath the bed
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