Since the sentences are not provided in this question a probable answer will serve to address. "Initiation" is defined as the start or the beginning of something, a commencement of a certain action/behavior. Moreover, initiation here could mean of something that will assess the ability or capacity of the individual before becoming a member of a peer group or certain community.
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Tips:
Maybe instead of saying "ain't nothing I want more than your love" say "I want nothing more than your love" for a classier and more professional line.
I would reccommend taking out "you're a catipiller, you're becoming a beuatiful butterfly" because in my opinion it almost seems like your belittling the person you love. Try using a different metaphor.
"ill love you to the day that I die" should be "I'll love you till the day that I die" which I might also change because it sounds very similar to a line in the song "Piano Man" by Billy Joel. Just a tip.
When you say "love is all I need, love is all I want" maybe say "your love is all I need, your love is all I want"
Advice:
Try creating stanzas, it will help your poem look more finished.
Compliments:
I love the comparison "like roses you have thorns" and "like a bull I have horns" cause that's basically you admitting that you know neither of you are perfect.
I love your ending, it's very well thought out.
I hope I helped!
Have a lovely day!
This post of view is a person's thoughts, which is first person. First person is the reader reading as the character, and that's how this introductory line is written.
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