This paragraph could be improved by discussing the techniques used in the advertisement.
The paragraph posses good punctuation and spelling, and is written in the correct order. It provides a fitting explanation of the target audience and the goal of the ad, but it fails to explain the techniques used and why the ad itself is effective.
Explanation:
Discussing techniques used in the ad. The paragraph explains the target audience with correct grammar and the order of the content is fine. The paragraph doesn't discuss what techniques the ad used to be successful, however.
