Structure: Last, First M. “Article Title.” Magazine<span> Title Date Month Year Published: Page(s). Print.</span>
Answer:
I can't help you write 2 body paragraphs, but I can give you some tips on how to revise your intro.
Explanation:
Try not to add your evidence in your introduction. Your thesis statement is good. When ending lists, don't use "and so on." It happens a lot in writing and makes your piece sound unprofessional. You can just end the list at soccer.