OVERALL GRADE: 3 ; too many grammar mistakes.
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<em>Hook:</em> Change it to: "Breakfast, anyone? How about more sleep and better grades? These seem appealing, right? These are just a few benefits of school convening later in the day."
<em>Claim/Thesis:</em> Change it to: "The school day should begin at 9:45 AM because it would allow students additional time to prepare for their school day; they would be better rested, perform better, and engage more in physical activities."
<em>Evidence/Reasoning #1:</em> Change it to: "After all, students' brains are still asleep when it's early in the morning. Schools that start at 9:00 AM or later allow students the opportunity to get the recommended amount of sleep [8.5 - 9.5 hours.]"
Okay I have to go now but I hope what I provided helps.
The story "The Origin of the Robin" suggests that parents' words are held at very high regard. This is how Ojibwa views the parent-child relationship.
In the story having a very high regard of the fathers' views, the child followed the father's dictate to the extent that the child came to harm. He died and became the Robin.
Martin Luther King Jr. was arrested and sent to jail because he and others were protesting the treatment of blacks in Birmingham, Alabama.
