Question

I am writing an essay for 8th grade about slavery and this is there any way I can make this more formal, or add more detail, or just make it better in any way? (I will give brainliest) Frederick Douglass was a slave himself and thought that slavery should be banned and was morally wrong while Captain Canot was fine with it and, in fact, supported it. Frederick, being a slave helped with the reason he was against it. But, there are many other reasons why he thought it was wrong. One other reason he thought slavery was wrong was that Frederick saw children's mothers and children being slaves while usually the father would be white and the slave owner, this also brought domestic violence. If the mothers or children would not listen. They would be whipped, beaten, and sometimes even killed. They were killed because they were seen as "expendables" as white slave owners could just buy more because most of the slave owners who owned slaves were usually rich and could afford to buy more at a slave auction. Frederick, also based his views on how he was taught and his education. He also knew that inequality and slavery were always hateful and bad, in the first place. Captain Canot, on the other hand, was born into a white family and was white himself and was always taught being a slave was not wrong and that everyone should own slaves, this is a reason why he believed it was ok to own slaves (seeing a pattern?). He then joined the military giving him the name "Captain." Which was a mastery of all men, to complement this he owned slaves himself. Captain Canot never experienced what being a slave was and what having no rights at all felt like. So of course, having no experience Captain Canot thought slavery was good. Both of these historical characters thought very differently, but for all the same reasons, experience.

Answer 1

Once being a slave himself, Frederick Douglass, believed that slavery was morally incorrect, and should be prohibited. Sadly, Captain Canot, being a slave trader, was not against it. He made good money off it, so he saw it as normal, and acceptable. As Frederick had experienced slavery and suffered through the cruelty of it, it gave him a strong reason for being an abolitionist. He saw the actions of slave owners, black women and children would be worked harsh hours, and if showed sign of defiance, they would be whipped, neaten and occasionally killed. Slave owners saw their slaves as expendables, a tool that can just be thrown away. Thinking, since they were wealthy, they could just buy another to replace the old slaves. Fredrick also based his views on his previous education, He understood that inequality and slavery were despicable, especially as an African American. On the other hand, Canot was raised in a wealthy white family, and his family most likely had slaves, so he saw slavery not to be an issue. Captain Canot got his Captain title by joining the military, and working his way up the ranks. With his title of Captain, he was awarded slaves. As to being privileged, Canot never experienced what being a slave was like. The cruelty, not being given freedom, being overworked, treated like you weren't a person, but rather a tool, whereas, Fredrick had experienced these conditions. Both these historical figures, thought in opposition, but for the same reasons, played a giant role in history.

My version is only an idea, your idea is amazing, I am only showing you an option to higher writing  :)

(I tried not to copy anything from yours, the formatting is unavailable to be seen in this extension, but make sure to format your essay properly! Your essay is written very thoroughly, though there were a few mishaps, other than that, exceptional job!)