I hope you are doing well. I heard about your mother and i'm very very sorry. I hope this makes you feel better. You are like my family and I get how you must feel about that. I really hope that you get better soon. I want you to know that if you need help with anything or if you need someone to talk to, i'll always be there for you.
you need to make the reader more involved with their surroundings so they get more invested and understand the plot development more, they would also maybe form ideas of their own similar to the peoples in the story
