This paragraph is super... choppy. It needs to be more fluid. Also, the hook is, well, not present. They have a good start with "Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories." You should build more on this idea of why gardening makes you happy. Through these memories you could share what you gain from gardening, and why you should stop thinking just about the time it takes but also the profit you can earn. To get rid of this "choppiness" you connect through the memories.
Hope this helps!
C. the ridiculousness and repetition
Which of these words is not a preposition?
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above
around
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Hi Elise!
Sorry, I had to go offline for a while. Here are your answers:
♦ Outline- <span>used to organize information into main points and subpoints
</span>♦ Evidence- <span>facts or details that provide support for main points
</span>♦ Thesis Statement- <span>gives the main idea and suggests the organization of the essay
</span>♦ Parenthetical Documentation-
♦ Quotation- <span>a statement that uses the exact wording from a text
</span>♦ Works Cited- <span>a list of sources that you used in your essay
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I hope they aren't too late. Good luck!☺
~Elisabeth
