Saturday is my favourite day of the week because on Saturday, I watch rugby with my dad. On other days, I also get to watch rugb
y, but not all day. There are other sports on other days to watch on TV. Some days my dad doesn't make it home from work until after I'm in bed. The highlight of the day is when we watch the Springboks play. Dad and I get so excited, we yell and cheer together. That's why look forward to Saturdays, watching TV with my dad. Saturday supper is a favourite of mine because eat with my father in front of the TV. All the other days, I have to eat at the table which is less fun. Dad gives me money and I go to the KFC on the corner. The lady there knows me and prepares my regular order as soon as she sees me. I enjoy chicken burgers and chips, because I can eat with my hands.5. This paragraph includes several irrelevant details. There seems a lack of unity as well. Re-write the above paragraph, improving the unity and clarity - you might have to split the paragraph and write it in a more concise manner.
Saturday is my favorite day of the week because on Saturday, I watch rugby with my dad. I get to watch rugby on other days as well, but not for the entire day. There are different sports on tv other days to watch on TV.
The highlight of the day is when we watch the Springboks play. My dad and I get so excited that we yell and cheer together. That's why we look forward to Saturdays. Saturday supper is a favorite of mine because I eat with my father in front of the TV. All the other days, I have to eat at the table which is not as enjoyable. Dad gives me money and I go to the KFC on the corner. The lady there knows me and prepares my regular order as soon as she sees me. I enjoy chicken burgers and chips, because I can eat them with my hands.
The topic sentence should set up what the paragraph is going to be about. This paragraph is about both heroes of the 1940s and heroes of the present, and sentence four is the only sentence that includes both. It also provides an indication that the paragraph is going to be comparing both types of heroes to each other.
TV can make you gain weight, and become lazier. Around a TV, you're eyes focus on the screen, which can blind not only the eyes but the brain. TV is not healthy
