Question

I'm working on an essay about sameness from the giver and can somebody tell me my mistakes I made.

Answer 1

Answer: Disclaimer - this is just my opinion, you do not have to make all of these changes.

First paragraph:

One positive element of sameness is hair; same hair is a good thing because people won’t make fun of other people’s hair and there would be less bullying at school. Also, people won’t get sad for having bad hair and they wouldn’t have to waste their time fixing it. An additional reason for this is because people who make hair products will make a substantial amount of profit. In the giver it said, “I don’t like my hair” on page 40.

Second paragraph:

Another positive element of sameness is language---everybody speaking the same language is advantageous because people will understand each other better and it would be easier to converse with others. Also,

Third paragraph:

A negative element of sameness is everyone would have the same job. Everybody having the same job would be a bad thing because a lot of people might not like their job. Also, a reason why everybody having the same job is a bad thing is because everybody would be driving to their job at the same time and there would be a lot of traffic and most people