I am not quit sure what your question is but I think it is great! :-) Only thing I would change is your hook. With the hook you want something strong to grab the readers attention. Example: Would you stay out late just to suffer many consequences? (Sometjing like that) Try to use something to really make the reader think about your topic!
Looks about good! I would also suggest that you change the hook to something. Maybe talk about how research shows that kids with curfews get higher grades than kids without them(that is not a fact at all, I literally just made that up to prove a point) then you can maybe end your hook by asking a question like “So, how can curfews affect children?” then go into your first body paragraph(Remember that you do not in any way have to use these if they’re not your cup of tea, I’m just giving examples of what I might do). Other than that, you seem to be just about set. I would give more criticism for it but I would be using high school standards for a middle schooler’s essay.
