Question

Brainliest to the one who will answer me correctly and properly

Answer 1

I decided to rewrite the story a little.

I walked over to say hello to the cute little baby umbrella, but when I reached her, I saw that she wasn't there, but on the contrary, there was an old woman. Her eyes were like a black hole and her teeth looked as if she s*ucked someone's blood. There was a stinking smell a smell worse than a toilet. I never imagined that kind of scenario and walked away. But then she began following me. I was scared. I ran as fast as possible and stopped near a shop. I was thirsty, and asked for a water bottle in the shop, but the same old lady was in the shop too. She gave me a bottle full of blood. I screamed and ran away. I went into my house and closed the doors, windows, and everything. I was exhausted and tense. I thought of watching TV for a while will be a relief. But to my surprise, the same lady was appearing on the TV too. She was walking into a house! I noticed that it's my house, but it isn't the front door, but the back door, and I forgot to close it. It was raining. I ran to the back door, but she was already in there. I saw lightning. I began running but unfortunately, I fell down, and she kept coming closer. I went into the bedroom and closed the door. For a while, nothing happened. But all of a sudden I heard a baby crying in my room. I carefully walked to her. She began transforming into the old lady and was screeching and coming toward me. I tried to open the door it didn't budge. As the lady was getting nearer, she began laughing. Then all of sudden I heard a loud sound! I didn't understand what it was. There was a red battery symbol in front of me as the VR goggles died. Then all of sudden everything went dark. I realized it was a newly developed VR that is so realistic. I almost forgot that it was VR.

also you should make the beginning story a little different, like: 'I was standing in the middle of the street. I looked around. I saw a cute little umbrella, and an old lady.'