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horrorfan [7]
2 years ago
14

How should Raoul revise this body paragraph to make it more effective?

English
1 answer:
andriy [413]2 years ago
8 0

To make a more effective paragraph we must review different aspects such as coherence, spelling and grammar.

<h3>How to revise a text to improve its effectiveness?</h3>

To improve the effectiveness of a text, that is to say that the message is transmitted correctly, we must carry out the following steps:

  • Read the text again.
  • Identify errors (grammatical, spelling and coherence).
  • Correct the errors.

We must bear in mind that grammatical errors refer to when we write a sentence in which the structure, the verb tense and the subject do not coincide, which negatively affects the reader's understanding.

On the other hand, spelling is writing the words wrong and coherence is that we have no connection between the sentences or we relate them in the wrong way.

Learn more about review in: brainly.com/question/8993398

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