-Are the words "Transition" and "Conclusion sentence" there because you used it as a guide, you are required to have them, or you need to put one in
-There was a little bit of a lot of word and sentence repeating, I feel like a different word choice could have been used, like synonyms. Like instead of knowledge being used 500 times, awareness or apprehension, understanding, or comprehension could have been used. Just look up synonyms of words you used a bunch of times or for bland (boring) words
- There is some punctuation that could be improved
- Flow is good, with a few choppy parts
- Other than those it is really good
-Let me know if you need anything else, I am more than happy to help
So you can look professional when you write late in life.
The following strategies that are involved in revisions are: Checking for redundant language, getting rid of euphemisms and cliches, and removing overly complicated language. Therefore, coming up with new ideas and topics does not apply in doing revisions. Revisions only include correcting what is wrong in a certain article, but not entirely changing the whole thought or idea.
Adjective is a describing word...its BROKEN
Because people have lost common sense these days.