Read the sentence. She met her friends in the lobby, the bottom floor, of the hotel so that they could head over to the refreshi
ng pool for a cool, brisk swim. Which is the best revision of this sentence? She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim. She met her friends at the hotel’s bottom floor, which is the lobby, so that they could head over to the swimming pool for a cool, brisk swim. For a cool, brisk, refreshing swim at the hotel’s pool, she met her friends in the hotel’s lobby on the bottom floor. The sentence is correct as written.
The best revision would be “She met her friends at the hotel’s bottom floor, which is the lobby, so that they could head over to the swimming pool for a cool, brisk swim”.
Indeed, this sentence is grammatically and syntactically correct since it divides the utterance in smaller unites of meaning which are completely clear and unambiguous. Additionally, its construction is the classical subject plus predicate which further facilitates comprehension.
