This is a great answer! I would first of all in your introduction paragraph change "very good" to impressive. I would take out the "but" at the beginning of the sentence. In the 2nd paragrpah I would leave out the words "version. The tree should be "poor looking," not "ugly". Also, you have a repeating "are" that says " we are first are" adn Janette as an adult should replace Adult Jannette. I hope that this helps you! :)
