Question

Make this sentence more descriptive.

Answer 1

Answer:

Growling angrily, the massive German shepherd startled Kendrick who was quickly jumping over the white picket fence to retrieve his worn baseball.  

Explanation:

The first  version is confusing.  A reader may not understand if Kendrick or the dog is jumping over the fence with the use of "he".  By clarifying this and including more active, descriptive words, we can create a better sentence.

Answer 2

Answer:

The German shepherd growled at Kendrick when jumping the fence to retrieve his ball.