Yep, that's basically the whole task. To change the passage to become more 'upbeat', yet still share similar words to the previous words, the following could be changed to...
trudged= plodded
shuffled= staggered
scrutinised= questioned
sparse=meagre
closed in= confined
anxious= eager (Although eager and anxious generally do not share a similar definition, in this context they do as 'anxious' is used to describe being excited to do something, and share the same meaning of 'Very eager or concerned to do something or for something to happen'
pried= wrenched
confronted= suddenly exposed
puzzling=baffling
something=remarkable
used=castoff
questioned=pondered
anxious=uneasy
Maybe change a little of the first sentence but the rest looks good
A character who conquers a scary creature.
The correct order for the introductory paragraph of this argumentative essay is;
- Children under the age of twelve should be not be allowed to play tackle football. First, since the discovery of the degenerative brain disease, C.T.E., which is caused by repetitive hits to the head, the people who support tackle football have been put on the defensive-- and for good reason. Second, there are many safer options than tackle football for children who love athletics. Third, although there have been changes made to the equipment and rules of tackle football, it is still not safe enough. Americans value their children much more than a game, don't they?
An argumentative essay is one where the author makes a claim and provides facts and evidence to back it up.
In the argumentative text above, the claim is that "Children under the age of twelve should not be allowed to play tackle football." To support this claim, facts are reeled out in sequential order.
It makes sense to add a rhetorical question at the end which the reader answers based on the evidence provided.
Thus, the argumentative essay can be ordered in the above form.
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