Our team has won more games than has any other team. - Sounds more illogical
Answer:
It's very beautiful and passionate!
Tips:
-you put "once you get to the top" twice so try changing or deleting the second one.
-some common grammar mistakes (capitalize, correct spots for commas/periods, etc).
-try not to use "etc" in your writing.
-you spelled "realize" as relies
Other than those the story was good!! :)
In the book "Night", by Elie Wiesel, Wiesel is recounting his memory of the German version of the gulag as well as his experience later in Auschwitz's labor camp, the hardships he faced, and his loss of his family as well as his identity. At the end, we see that his experience changed how he thought and acted, and the event of his Dad's death haunted him throughout his life. (This is because he failed to save his dad.)
