Question

[1] Cory tried out for his school play, Rumors, by Neil Simon. [2] Cory got the part of "Ken." [3] Cory attended rehearsal every day after school, and he practiced his lines every night. [4] Cory was fantastic on opening night. [5] Cory made the audience laugh! Why does this paragraph lack sentence variety?

Answer 1

This paragraph lacks sentence variety because of verb tense, lack of pronouns, and lack of transitions words. The writer could have different tenses in the sentences to add variety to the paragraph and to create a timeline. Moreover, the use of personal pronouns to substitute the word Cory could have change the sentences. Finally, transition word could have add variety and cohesion to the paragraph.