Question

As her sister drove Shonda to the police station, questions ping-ponged through her mind. Where had Sam and his cousin really been? How did they even come in contact with the police? What is this "misunderstanding"? Sam had never been involved in any trouble, much less legal trouble. Did she really know Sam? A scene flashed into Shonda's mind. Her wedding day. Shonda looked beautiful in her wedding dress with the long white train trailing behind it, and Sam looked as handsome as he ever had. They smiled as they recited their vows. As she reflected on this day, Shonda's heart began to slow and she smiled for the first time since the phone had rung. In this portion of the narrative, the author uses a flashback to develop the relationship between Shonda and Sam. However, the flashback does not address the questions that Shonda asks in the paragraph before it, making the character’s response in the paragraph after the flashback illogical. Rewrite the flashback scene, so it develops the relationship between the characters seen later in the story. (15 points)

Answer 1

Answer:

The question in her mind refers to the issue of trust between the partners. So, this is how we should develop the scene with a flashback and refer it to the response Shonda had after the flashback. We know that she got calm and smiled. This brings us to the assumption that the flashback should give reasons to make her calm down. I would choose the scene that would characterize Sam as a reliable partner and a loving husband. We may leave the same setting but showcase the other factors that contribute to the feeling of confidence and trust. I divided the piece of writing into three paragraphs so that the second one is the re-written flashback

Explanation:

As her sister drove Shonda to the police station, questions ping-ponged through her mind. Where had Sam and his cousin really been? How did they even come in contact with the police? What is this "misunderstanding"? Sam had never been involved in any trouble, much less legal trouble. Did she really know Sam?  

A scene flashed into Shonda's mind. Her wedding day. Shonda, unlike the ordinary brides who would fear the groom might change his mind at the last moment, felt happy and triumphant. She had been dating him for two years and had various opportunities to test him for those qualities we normally expect from a partner in a marriage. No doubt, she could trust him.  They smiled as they recited their vows.  

As she reflected on this day, Shonda's heart began to slow and she smiled for the first time since the phone had rung.