we need to see the writing compt
Answer:I'm not sure
Explanation:sorry I could not help
Feedback:
I think your descriptions are great! I like the way you describe the setting and how it makes the observer feel with extreme detail. I was able to picture everything really well in my head. Moving forwards, I think what you should do is reassess what you're writing about. Maybe I misunderstood what you meant by <em>"describing a moutain," </em>but I feel that you spent too much time talking about the overall setting and how it made the observer feel instead of the actual mountain. I liked your description of the mountain being "a beast arisen from nowhere; its tip to be unseen" and I think you should continue this as you'll prevent yourself from drifting too far from the object of interest.
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Even in today's world men and women both have different levels of privilege. In the 1900s women were seen more and housewives and mother's than as people. Now let's go back farther in time when women were not allowed to read, go to school or even think for themselves, men were always able to dream bigger and go after those dreams because they could. While women had to think practical because they know they had way less of a chase of there dreams actually coming true.
she had a talent for making people laugh
she is the oldest of her mother’s children
she spent time in a “clinic”
hope this helps!
