There is typically more than one way to communicate an idea with regard to sentence structure, and how the sentence is structured contributes to its tone. For instance, short/brief sentences can contribute to a sense of hurry or haste. For instance let’s look at the following sentences:
I was late. I quickly ate. I brushed my teeth. I forgot to comb my hair. Then, I was out the door.
Can you feel the tone of urgency communicated by the short sentences?
Likewise, long and drawn out sentences can provide the tone of sluggishness and/or unwillingness. This is something to keep in mind when constructing your own sentences—as you are writing always be aware of your sentence structure and the tone it may communicating.
I believe the answer is loaded language.
Answer:
one of them is a fragment, it's the latter sentence.
Explanation:
it seems that the second sentence has gotten it backwards.
the beginning part "especially when the wind picked up" is what makes it a fragment.
doesn't it make better sense if it were written in this way instead?
"the conditions were perfect for flying our kite, especially when the wind picked up."
After two days of hiking, we reached the apex of the mountain.
