Okay, here’s what I’ll do for you. I’ll answer your questions in a few words, and I want you to make sure the answers are longer than the ones I give you. 1) This paragraph does not flow at all. 2) The rhythm is very choppy. 3) The most important ideas are when she moves to the West Coast because it gives more detail on her life. The least important is her childhood and how she is brought up because it hardly talks about it. 4) The ideas aren’t well connected because it just states facts and doesn’t expand on them. 5) The relationship is basically what ever happened next in her life, no detail. 6) I would add more detail and make the sentences less choppy. This should help you rewrite the paragraph.
<span>Passage that most effectively
uses transitions is passage (A). Transitions are words or phrases that improve
connections and transitions in sentences or paragraphs. They give the logical
order and structure to the text. So, when in passage (A) when it’s stated that
humans are self-centered, but still animal loving it’s most logical to use
transition “still” and transition “but” when implying that humans treat one
another the same as they treat animals.</span>
Answer:
D
Explanation:
Sentence 5 should go between sentence 2 and 3.
