Five possible changes to the story could have been adding more flaws to the main character: this character is a borderline Mary Sue, they do not possess any earthly flaws making them this God like celestial being. No one in real life is actually like that therefore you cannot relate to the character on a deeper personal level because they do not share any of the same experiences that you have gone through. Also it causes a problem with other characters who are God like beings like the main character because if they all are special then no one really is special. Another problem is the conflict: I feel as if the author planned a story really well but it was not executed onto paper properly. This cost plot holes and confusion. It was poorly written. I feel as if the author could have used an Organization chart to write out the characters give them personality and write out the conflicts and the rising action as a draft before they actually publish the book. Third way you could change the story: circling back to personality, a few of the characters have no personality whatsoever. And they have no character development.
